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We would be
dark, matter of fact-
I'd turn into Penelope.
Pen-e-lope, like cantelope;
She was ripe, over ripe perhaps,
Withered with the waiting years,
Penny parched from rolling tears-
enough to swim him home.

If he was water you are stone.
Sandstone. Solid. Something.
Young boys need to cling to. Something.
A summit they can fling from. Something.
A bow to fit the string for. Something.
That's not me but it's something.

You would be
warm, weighted and one
second son, quite undone
stays. Smiles upon my
wasted weaving fingertips,
shuns his father's treasure ship
and holds me close, alone.
©2008-2009 *cheramyn
:iconcheramyn:

Author's Comments

This is a poem about la la la love. Or lack of it. Mainly referencing Penelope, who was of course, the wife of Odysseus, waited for him for twenty years while he was off sailing, fighting monsters, getting it on with sorceresses called Circe. He finally comes home and she's like this epitome of fidelity and faith but now she's too old. I hate men.

HOWEVER when her mean old husband dies Penelope goes and gets herself a toy boy in the form of Odysseus's' son by Circe, Telegonus, who's name literally translates as, "Born Afar".

Other details, a few water/sailing things in there are explicable I think but the weaving thing, Penelope warded off these other suitors by promising to marry when she'd finished weaving a burial shroud, and unpicking it when everyone slept. Also, when her husband returned from the sea, she knew it was him because he strung his own bow- it was a moment of like mindedness.

Nice. I don't like it when people just like/love you because you're there and you're tangible, not because you're you. But then I think I might be guilty of it too.

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:iconroxy-leo:
gorgeously executed. and i dont care if thats not a phrase, it fits this. you area very talented girl missus!!!!
:iconcheramyn:
I think it's a phrase? I like it it reminds me of olympic divers, like when they dive and the commentator says things like "gorgeously executed". Thank you beautiful :D

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:iconbeigegray:
I enjoy your creativity in your rhyme scheme. Your style is definitely unique and refreshing.
Withered with the waiting years,
Penny parched from rolling tears-


<3

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And I asked myself about the present: how wide it was, how deep it was, how much was mine to keep.
--Vonnegut
:iconcheramyn:
thankyou, I'm not a champion at rhyme but I'm glad you liked it :heart:

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This is the way the world ends: Not with a bang but a whimper
:iconbeigegray:
I enjoyed it :)

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And I asked myself about the present: how wide it was, how deep it was, how much was mine to keep.
--Vonnegut
:iconalibi2014:
This is so beautiful. I love the repetition of "something" in the second stanza, and I especially like how you bring in so many unusual words and phrases, like "cantelope" and "penny parched." There's a really neat juxtaposition between such an old story and such modern language. I feel like I get something new out of this every time I read it. Excellent work!

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"You only live twice:
Once when you are born
And once when you look death in the face."

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